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Post by Steller's Jay on Aug 19, 2006 0:17:46 GMT -5
Please don't hesitate to comment with praise, constructive criticism, whatever! I'm open to everything!  |
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Post by PadmeSkywalker on Aug 21, 2006 23:47:54 GMT -5
Love that the story is from Padme's view..... I can't wait for more..... their love for each other is so apparent in your writing! My heart broke when Anakin told Padme he had to leave.... she loves him so much! She hardly can bear him being away!
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Post by padme52 on Aug 29, 2006 13:00:21 GMT -5
I just finished reading chapters one and two. You do a great job of capturing Padmes' perspective on their relationship. You also capture and describe the strong sensual bond between them which is setting a nice tone for the story. I find myself wanting to read more details about what they are doing There is no doubt here that these two are deeply in love. Nice job. |
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Post by Steller's Jay on Aug 29, 2006 19:47:32 GMT -5
You mean, in the bedroom?  |
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Post by PadmeSkywalker on Aug 29, 2006 22:03:06 GMT -5
I finished it, I love it..... a little sad at the end, them having to part, but he told her he would always come back to her...... I loved that line! Well done......
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Post by Steller's Jay on Aug 30, 2006 12:23:32 GMT -5
Thank you, PadmeSkywalker. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by padme52 on Aug 30, 2006 22:58:38 GMT -5
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Post by padme52 on Sept 1, 2006 18:16:28 GMT -5
I love this story as I have just finished it again. It still moves me when Padme in her love for him lets him go ,and he tells her he will always come back to her.
Anakin the Jedi and so much more.
Wonderful story.
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Post by Steller's Jay on Sept 1, 2006 20:20:17 GMT -5
Thanks, padme52. You give good warm fuzzies.  |
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Post by padme52 on Sept 1, 2006 22:44:57 GMT -5
You are welcome doubleagent.
There is nothing to criticize here you covered all of your bases.
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Post by crystalcat on Sept 15, 2006 19:02:55 GMT -5
Hi, "doubleagent" --
:::looking through holes cut in newspaper:::
This isn't about Padme's Heart (which I loved, by the way), but I wanted to tell you that I read your first Mary Sue installment and loved it!
But please don't stop working on Shattered Mission in favor of the new story!
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Post by christyc21 on Sept 16, 2006 15:50:55 GMT -5
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Post by Steller's Jay on Sept 16, 2006 21:36:21 GMT -5
Thank you, christyw21. I really loved writing it; it came from MY heart.
crystalcat, are you talking about that MariBeth story? That's not mine. I've got enough to do trying to get Shattered Mission out!
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Post by crystalcat on Sept 17, 2006 8:47:27 GMT -5
crystalcat, are you talking about that MariBeth story? That's not mine. I've got enough to do trying to get Shattered Mission out! Whoops! My bad. I'll tell the real writer I like it. I think I saw your name as the last commentor and somehow that translated wrong in my mind. I am waiting for you to catch up here with Shattered Mission - and hopefully come out with the next new chapter, though! [please!] |
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Post by Steller's Jay on Sept 17, 2006 21:54:20 GMT -5
I know, I know! *sigh* I'm doing lots of other stuff and get just a few lines written every now and then. But I'll get it out eventually!
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Wow, this story was just absolutley wonderful...I loved reading it...You stayed true to some aspects of the movie and yet changed it enough to fit the way it should have been, the way we would have liked it to be...I felt as though I were there seeing it all through your writing...You did an Excellent job... ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D 