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Post by crystalcat on Dec 8, 2006 19:25:59 GMT -5
Chestnut, hmmm? I'm wondering where you are deriving the colors from. Are they significant to you in some sense?
I thought that Toller would be instrumental in finding Obi-Wan; I like how you managed to do it without having to haul him away on a dangerous mission. But I'm still a bit apprehensive about exactly how you'll manage to end this. I'm not seeing that it can end happily, no matter what you choose to do at this point (but please, go ahead and surprise me!)
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Post by Steller's Jay on Dec 8, 2006 20:30:03 GMT -5
64-color Crayola Crayon Box!
I've been going around in circles trying to decide how to end this. I think I'm going to go with my original idea, somewhat modified. I'm sure that helps you a lot! ;D
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Post by Annie on Dec 10, 2006 21:39:40 GMT -5
Since I don't know what your original idea was I have no idea what you're going to do. I know I have my own hopes and hope-nots, but you are the writer and it's your tale!
I have no clue what you're doing with Toller but I want to find out! I hope he can find Obi-Wan or at least tell Anakin where to go. It's going to be interesting no matter what!
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Post by Saphira on Dec 15, 2006 22:49:11 GMT -5
It's been a long time since I read this story! Forgive me for taking so long to get to it again! Reading this story once more made me miss how much I enjoyed reading it before! I was last at around Chapter Twenty in your story when I last read it, and I continued from there. I had a lot to catch up in your story! But enjoyed it very much! First off, I want to say how adorable, how sweet and cute young Toller is!! Oh I love him so much! You've make him into such a loveable character! He's such a sweet youngling, so innocent! I am really glad for Toller, going to the Jedi Temple, meeting the Jedi and being able to talk with people at last. He's so cute, his thoughts. He's so enthusiastic! I'm glad he's learning how to talk to! And I agree with Anakin, by the time young Toller learns to speak aloud-it will probably be almost impossible for him to stop! I think it's really fascinating how Toller can see each Force presence as a color! I think the colour's you have Toller describe the characters as being are perfect! It makes sense-Anakin being blue. And Obi-Wan chesnut! Yoda White, Mace Windu-Orchid! "It’s the name of one of the coloring pens I draw with, Master Skywalker." I laughed out loud at that! Love how you describe Mace Windu when he said that! Ah to funny! And young Toller may be able to help in the search for Obi-Wan!! I find Toller very interesting, he's got so many unique abilities. He was able to find Anakin when he was mediating in Obi-Wan's quarters! He was able to help Anakin, and when he found Obi-Wan's belt it helped him discover his colour. In other words Obi-Wan's force presence! He even drew a picture of Obi-Wan and the Janelle! And the animals that they take care of there! He did that with Anakin and Padme to! He is a very smart boy! So talented!! He's given Anakin a lot of help! But when Anakin finds Obi-Wan at last, he will cause Obi-Wan some grief as Qui-Gon warned him. He'll have to decide what he'll do. Be with Janelle or not. To decide if he'll still want to be a Jedi or go on living with Janelle. Qui-Gon mentioned him feeling guilt. Could this have anything to do with him fully understanding how Anakin felt to be in love but have the code telling him he could not? I feel bad for Obi-Wan, it's going to be so hard to go through something like that! But I hope he decides to be with Janelle!! He has to! Their love is to great to deny! He could still be a Jedi of course-it's like Anakin and Padme! And who's the person, the Rodian who attacked Cohl and Janelle? I bet San Hill sent him-probably to find Obi-Wan and kill him! But of course, Obi-Wan doesn't realize because he doesn't remember who he is! I have a feeling he's going to find out who he is very soon, if Anakin finds him! Which they will soon, Anakin, Sikka, and Oren will be going to find him-in the search for San Hill as well. I hope they find him-for Oren's sake, the poor kid, he's been going through a lot! It's been so hard for him. But I worry for Obi-Wan to-once he realizes who he is! I have really enjoyed reading this-and now I want more! Please post more soon-I eagerly await an update from you! Well Done!!   |
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Post by Steller's Jay on Dec 15, 2006 23:26:59 GMT -5
My goodness! Thank you, Saphira. Such lovely comments. I'm working on the next chapter; hope to post it pretty soon.
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Post by crystalcat on Dec 23, 2006 9:13:34 GMT -5
Wow, THANK YOU!!! I was afraid you were going to kill her off to solve Obi-Wan/Cohl's problem for him. I'm glad you decided against it - even if she dies now it won't absolve him of having to handle the impasse in the meanwhile. It was very sad, though, for this to happen right after he'd decided he didn't care about his past anymore - almost as if the Force was waiting for him to say that before plopping his past in front of him.
I can't wait to see what you have happen next - I'm sure he'll feel compelled to choose (though Anakin may try to convince him otherwise when he knows the whole story). And I'm not entirely sure he should choose, anyway - what happened to him was just too ... specific (can't think of a better word); the Force was at work there with him meeting Janelle - and also with the return of his memory.
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Post by arie on Dec 23, 2006 10:21:33 GMT -5
;D
Thank the Force, Obi's been found... but uh.... I wonder, what are you planning to do with Janelle?
This is a positively fascinating story! Please keep it up!
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Post by christyc21 on Dec 26, 2006 13:32:13 GMT -5
ah..poor Janelle..it's great the Obi-Wan has been found..but..what of Janelle's Cohl..hmm..well I can't wait to read more..it has me hooked..I'm looking forward to seeing what you write next for this..
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Post by Annie on Dec 26, 2006 20:26:27 GMT -5
How exciting! Hearing Anakin call his name brought back his memory of himself! Now Anakin senses his pain, and it seems to be emotional pain to me- what about Janelle? Well, nobody can understand his feelings now than Anakin. Will he encourage him to stand up for love, or will Ob-Wan take over and deny the attachment? There is more to the heart than can be in any rule. A very tough situation seems to be ahead for them all.
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Post by Astrid on Dec 27, 2006 11:00:19 GMT -5
A big break in the case! I can't even guess what will happen now. Keep it coming!
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Post by PadmeSkywalker on Dec 28, 2006 22:21:23 GMT -5
awesome! seeing Anakin and probably feeling the force from him, Cohl remembers who he really is.... I was worried for a second that he was going to forget all his memories as Cohl! Whew! Hopefully Obi wan will continue as her husband, like Anakin and Padme.....
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Post by crystalcat on Dec 31, 2006 9:20:17 GMT -5
Oh, no. It sounds to me like he's trying too hard to distance himself from her; like he feels he belongs in the order no matter what and the only real fear he has is that he will be expelled - that if they tell him he can get an annulment and everything will go back to the way it was before (so far as the council is concerned) he'll jump at the chance. Poor Janelle.
I'm really wondering how Oren is going to take this considering the fit he threw (metaphorically speaking) when he found out about Anakin & Padme. But I think Anakin & Sikka will be on the same wavelength at least.
This late in the story and I'm still not quite sure how you're going to end it. Bravo!
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Post by Astrid on Jan 2, 2007 10:23:08 GMT -5
Oh dear, so much is still hanging and all those feelings hang in the balance. How can he just turn away from her now? I would love to see him get to keep her and then they can double date with Padme and Anakin! What will the council say? Time for some reconsideration of the old rules?
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Post by Annie on Jan 2, 2007 19:44:34 GMT -5
I'm really wondering how Oren is going to take this considering the fit he threw (metaphorically speaking) when he found out about Anakin & Padme. That is a biggie, and how ironic, after what happened earlier in the story! The padawans, the council, Janelle and her father, he's got a lot of explaining to do. The way you described his and Janelle's feelings after the bombshell was excellent and touching. It's very tangled now and I can't wait to see how you work it out! |
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Post by Annie on Jan 16, 2007 22:35:42 GMT -5
So now Oren is having problems with Obiwan having a love too. He has to question it all in his mind, and he must also question the rule against it? Like he thought, if the purest knight we have, and the Chosen One can feel it...well, IMO that should be a real message about the Jedi being human too. It will be interesting to see how you play this out!
So now they're going in front of the council, and he leaves her, both of them sad. I wonder if they'll ever be together again. How heart wrenching for them both. It's cold outside, so stay in and keep writing!
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