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Post by Annie on May 28, 2007 9:23:57 GMT -5
I'm sorry to see you cut his hair and gave him the beard back, I liked his new look! I guess Janelle did too. It will be so sad for her if she has loved something that never existed. Maybe he can be both? I hope so. Good to see he won't take off her little bond bracelet yet. The deep emotions here are too much for anyone to stand. No matter what happens now there is bound to be sadness and regret.
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Post by secura on Jun 4, 2007 1:28:32 GMT -5
hey--i'm chic_jedi from the other site, and i just wanted to let you know i'm still reading and i can't wait to hear more!
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Post by Astrid on Jun 12, 2007 9:22:56 GMT -5
Bummer:( I was so into that love story with Cohl, and bam just like that it's over and tossed aside without even a fight. I thought after all those deep feelings, more would come of it.
So now the story changes gears to the trial.
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Post by padme on Jun 12, 2007 14:46:24 GMT -5
Hey Steller!!!! Great to see you again!
It's a bummer that Obi-Wan cut it off with Jannelle. I wish he would have at least waited to hear from the Council. Or did we? humm, maybe I need to go back and reread.
Now the Trial. OOOO boy! I love all the 'objection's'! That's right buck what you don't know or understand!!!
Can't wait to see what else happens.
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Post by Annie on Jun 13, 2007 6:49:18 GMT -5
I must say I am more than disappointed in this turn of events, I actually feel a bit, well, sorry, but, cheated. I have been reading this for months, through all those chapters, and I really felt like in the end I'd be rewarded with something really awesome. Now I feel like it was a long, intense football game and my team lost. If it were a movie, I'd feel like walking out. I'm going to be honest and say the ending of the relationship seems like a real cop-out, like you just got boxed into a difficult situation (and maybe were being pressured by someone real whiney about the order) and went for the 'easy out' and then decided to change the subject with a trial. Maybe you can put it away that easy, but I can't, and I can't believe Janelle and Obi-Wan can either, not from the feelings I had gotten before from your writing. Maybe sometime you can write an 'alternate' version where something else happens?
Also I feel like it's almost a slap in the face of Anakin and Padme. They defied the order and loved, and the council accepted it, and it may have done the same for Obi and Janelle. To tell you the truth I was looking forward to future sequels with the two happy couples! It seems almost insulting to A and P to have the 'I'm a Jedi knight and I don't do this' lecture and her 'oh honey I understand' where A and P went ahead and went with their love in spite of everything. It's almost like a political statement that they were bad and wrong, and good ol' Obi-Won is doing the right thing, though I'm sure you didn't intend that. I think if you'd just had Obi-Wan turn out to not love her the way "Cohl" did because he was a different person, and they grew apart naturally after he got his memory back, I could have accepted that a lot better than this pious stuff about being a Jedi and her understanding, IMO.
Sorry for the rant, but as a longtime reader (and hopefully a friend) I wanted to give a totally honest review. Of course it's your story and you can do what you want, everyone has that right and that's why we write. I've seen lots of stories and shows where I really don't like what happens and I keep watching/reading anyway. These comments are NO reflection on your writing, you are as always an excellent and descriptive writer with a lot of talent.
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Post by Steller's Jay on Jun 14, 2007 21:37:47 GMT -5
I'm going to be honest and say the ending of the relationship seems like a real cop-out, like you just got boxed into a difficult situation (and maybe were being pressured by someone real whiney about the order) and went for the 'easy out' and then decided to change the subject with a trial..... Maybe sometime you can write an 'alternate' version where something else happens?
Also I feel like it's almost a slap in the face of Anakin and Padme. They defied the order and loved, and the council accepted it, and it may have done the same for Obi and Janelle. To tell you the truth I was looking forward to future sequels with the two happy couples! It seems almost insulting to A and P to have the 'I'm a Jedi knight and I don't do this' lecture and her 'oh honey I understand' where A and P went ahead and went with their love in spite of everything. It's almost like a political statement that they were bad and wrong, and good ol' Obi-Won is doing the right thing, though I'm sure you didn't intend that. I think if you'd just had Obi-Wan turn out to not love her the way "Cohl" did because he was a different person, and they grew apart naturally after he got his memory back, I could have accepted that a lot better than this pious stuff about being a Jedi and her understanding, IMO. Annie, I was not pressured by anyone (who could that have been?) to write the relationship the way I did. Anyway, that person has already decided that Obi-Wan was 'spoiled' and impure after sleeping with Janelle.  Obi-Wan spent the great majority of 40 years in the Order and I believe he was a true Jedi Knight. Anakin is, as well; my prequel to this story, Padme's Heart, shows that very well, I think. My view of Obi-Wan is that he would have been shocked and appalled at having had an intimate relationship with someone, and that's how I wrote it. And I don't consider Obi-Wan pious at all, just completely dedicated to the Order and its Code. Perhaps someday I will write an alternate version; in fact, my original idea had Obi-Wan not being able to let go of his love and the Council deciding to let him return to her. I may yet do that, if I go with an alternate version. BTW, that particular person we have both alluded to is not the one who caused me to change my mind. I did that myself, the more I thought about it. I understand that many of my readers wanted Obi-Wan and Janelle to 'live happily ever after'. It is a very attractive idea, certainly, but it's not the way I chose to go with it. Who knows, I may, in the alternate version, do that and write some sequels with their kids. I also haven't revealed the whole point of this relationship, so y'all will just have to wait. It will be revealed after the trial and after Obi-Wan faces the Council.  Oh, and I thank you, Annie, for being so honest! |
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Post by Steller's Jay on Jun 15, 2007 9:42:26 GMT -5
I am rethinking the plot of Shattered Mission. I've run into a snag and I need to change some stuff. I may even remove the last chapter, but maybe not.
Just an annoucement. BTW, I'm leaving Sunday (6/17) for a two-week trip, so I won't be able to post anything until I return.
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Post by Annie on Sept 23, 2007 16:40:40 GMT -5
I am sorry but I had to delete that last post by the guest since the strange symbols stretched the whole thread so wide the page wouldn't work. The guest's IP was from China so maybe they didn't have the right text for this site's writing. I hope the guest will come back and try again.
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Post by PadmeSkywalker on Oct 7, 2007 8:02:44 GMT -5
good chapter.... poor Obi wan so hard on himself!
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Post by Annie on Oct 8, 2007 13:31:27 GMT -5
Oh that was rough, but so well done by you. He did the right thing, if he had covered that up it may cast doubt on all his other testimony. So now everyone knows, even all the Jedi. It will be interesting to see how everyone takes it. I still can't help but hold out hope it's not too late for him and Janelle! I know he'd have Anakin's support.
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Obi-Wan spent the great majority of 40 years in the Order and I believe he was a true Jedi Knight. Anakin is, as well; my prequel to this story, Padme's Heart, shows that very well, I think. My view of Obi-Wan is that he would have been shocked and appalled at having had an intimate relationship with someone, and that's how I wrote it. And I don't consider Obi-Wan pious at all, just completely dedicated to the Order and its Code.
